Hi Petra Pansky

Congratulations on your Writing.com account anniversary! I'm sending this review in honor of the occasion.


Positives

The two scenarios you selected (difficulties with your landlord or property management, and technical issues with online orders) are near-universal experiences that I think were a smart choice here to include along to exemplify the kinds of ridiculous things that many of us have to deal with every day. I also think that disclaimer at the top of your piece was a really smart, important element of the piece, so that the reader has context for your perspective.


Suggestions

For me, the comedy in the situation didn't come through quite as well as I had hoped at the outset of the piece. Reading it felt a bit more like general complaints about the inconveniences of the events described, rather than inherently comedic scenarios or a humorous perspective on them. If you're looking to increase the humor in the piece, I'd recommend tweaking the tone of the piece a bit to be more tongue-in-cheek or witty rather than incredulous and cynical.


Overall

Overall, I thought you did a good job with this piece. It was an entertaining read with some real potential to be a very funny piece with a little workshopping of the comedy elements. Nice work!


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Jeff
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