Hi Serene Vanity

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Positives

This was a thought-provoking piece. I thought you presented your ideas well and got your point across clearly.


Suggestions

Given the complexity of the content, I'd suggest varying the format a bit to break the presentation into smaller, more digestible chunks of text. With so many ideas and concepts packed into each of two paragraphs, I found it a little hard to follow along with from time to time.


Overall

Overall, I enjoyed the piece. Nice work!


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