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 It's Classified  [E]
Hand it Over
by QueenNormaJean It'sa WrapY'all
Review of It's Classified  
Review by ScaryBee
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

*Reading* THE STORY

George wants his classified file, but the clerk isn't giving it up.

*Smile*WHAT I LIKED

I loved the ending. It was solid and it made me chuckled.

*Star* POV NARRATION/TENSE

This is told in the 3rd person limited from George's perspective. Past tense is used in the story.

*Star*DIALOGUE

There's a nice blend of dialogue and narration. Dialogue tags are used appropriately.

*Star*OPENING PARAGRAPH

The opening paragraph put me right in the moment as George is asking for his classified folder. The opening paragraph offers a good hook.


*Star*CHARACTERS

George is determined. A little determination goes a long way.


*Star*FLOW & PACING

It's spot on. I was right in the moment with George.

*Star*MECHANICS

I did not notice and spelling/punctuation mistakes. Good use of WDC ML to increase the font and make it easy on the eyes.

*Star*PARTING THOUGHTS

The title fits the story well. The author uses a good economy of words to tell a solid story. The ending lands on a light-hearted comedic beat. A nice vinyette with a touch of A.I.

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