Positive Hearts
A Review from: "Positive Hearts Reviews Group" 


Hello, Jackson!

INITIAL IMPRESSION / OVERVIEW:

I think you succeeded in writing "a song of old England, written in the language of the time."

Your poem / song kept my attention the whole way through.



MORE DETAILED FEEDBACK:

Happy Writing.Com Anniversary day and month! Annette, the leader of "Anniversary Reviews" here has gotten me hooked on trying to find good things to read and review on people's anniversary days. Today you are the beneficiary of her kind encouragement. I hope you enjoy this review as a celebration of your time here and find the review uplifting.

You engaged my senses and emotions as I read this old England style song poem of yours. The jealousy of the not Matamis women was clear, as was the love of James, Matamis' husband to be / husband at the end.

I was happy to see that our beloved former WDC member, Rupali, gave you an awardicon for this poem, both for the poem's sake and as a lovely memory of her time here. I miss her and her poetry challenge and various activities.

I enjoyed your use of various flowers throughout your old England style song poem. I know you call it a song, but it feels like a poem to me, so I am calling it both in this review.

I didn't notice any spelling in your old England style song poem.

I thought the romance/ love and emotional genres you selected were perfect for this old England style song poem of yours.


IDEAS TO MAKE YOUR PIECE STRONGER:
In the spirit of helpfulness (and because of the rules of Tour de Ports review challenge I'm in require that, I have a suggestion to make your piece stronger. I know not everyone wants constructive criticism, so if you want to skip this part, no worries at all! Just move on to the next section and know that I enjoyed your old England style song poem.


The best thing I can think of would be to add a few lines with Matamis' perspective. Did she love James? It feels more like she was a prize to be won than a willing participant. Though maybe that was the perspective of men in old England? I'm not a big history person.




CONCLUSION:
You wrote an interesting old England style song poem that I enjoyed reading.

Thank you for sharing your time, creativity, heart, romantic spirit, and writing with the Writing.Com community!

Once again, happy anniversary month! I hope the year ahead is filled with blessings and joy for you!

May love, joy and peace be yours in abundance!
PWheeler







Positive Hearts
A Review from: "Positive Hearts Reviews Group" 





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