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Review #4757361
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Castle's Chessboard  [E]
Random Writing, Blogs and Adventures
by KingsSideCastle
         Review for entry/chapter: "Candy Wrapper
Review by Cubby
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Tulipp* Greetings, KingsSideCastle! I am reviewing this because I am part of "I Write in 2024. *Smile*

*Quill* First of all, my reviews are intended to be helpful and encouraging, not hurtful in any way. Use what you feel works for you, and leave the rest.

Prompt: "WRITE A POEM ABOUT SOMETHING WORTHLESS."

*Tulipo* The Positives/What I Liked

         *Bulletv* What a great idea for this prompt! I'm impressed with the vision you've come up with: an empty, discarded candy wrapper (preferably Starburst because that's one of your favorite candy *Wink*)

         *Bulletg* Your imagery is amazing, showing us the colorful, waxy, crumpled paper flying in the breeze with no set destination. You also describe it as once being a guardian, protecting the sweet prize within. I love this! *Smile*

         *Bulletp* I think my favorite line is: Ensuring a moment of joy to the one who unwrapped it *Hungry*

         *Bulletb* Great choice on the centering of this piece, along with the font, font size (I appreciate this, thank you!), and line-spacing.


*Tulipo* Suggestions/Comments to Consider

         Stanza 2: Line 1: It worthless now *Right* It's worthless now


*Tulipo* Final Thoughts

         This is great. I definitely will look at discarded candy wrappers in another light from now on! Thank you for sharing. Nice work.


Have a great day and...*Quill*
  K e e p on W r i t i n g !
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