On Crabapple Beach [ASR] My world = sand, beach, ocean, and scribbles |
My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines. HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews" THE POEM Life's reflections and observations on Crabapple Beach. WHAT I LIKED I loved the personal tone of the poem. It invited the reader to take a peek at the poet's world. STRUCTURE This is a free form poem with no apparent rythme scheme. MECHANICS I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. DESCRIPTIONS I liked: "her first newscast to the world, with a sigh, as if saying, “I do,” -- Newscast here, implies a proclamation or an announcement, or even a commitment followed up with an "I do." There's a lot of emotion here, bubbling up and bursting out. PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS The opening invites the reader in as the poet walks down the beach and keeps them reading. The title is a nice fit for the poem. I enjoyed the inspiration the poet took from the beach. Nature has a way of stirring of the soul. That comes out in this poem. An Angel Army Review
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