Hi arianne_drafts,

This is a fantastic essay. The title is direct and to the point. The reader knows exactly what they will be getting out of the essay. I have tried three times to learn a new language with no success. I was fascinated with your topic and began to read right away to find out more. You launch into the essay without introduction or preamble. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the topic and the essay. They will read to the last word. You have written about your journey to learning a new language. The reader is delighted with the look they get at you as a person as well as a writer. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the essay tedious. You use a formal, organized style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.