That's What You Get [13+] Robert is caught in a lie |
Greetings, I’m here for I Write 2024. A brief and enjoyable story about a dishonest car repair shop owner who gets what’s coming. You have all the essential elements of a flash fiction: beginning, middle and end, well sketched characters, and a relatable situation with a good moral. We’ve all had experiences where someone was obviously lying, and it can be difficult to know how to respond. This was a satisfying ending as we see the brash and careless shop owner shown up by a smart customer (if he’s really smart he’ll have his car towed out of that shop - if Robert lies about being available, what else will he lie about?) Grammar and spelling and all that are great; there was nothing here to pull me out of the story. I went along wondering what would happen next and if there would be a dark twist or something. I like the realistic “kitchen sink drama” type of setting you’ve chosen; it’s instantly recognizable and easy to follow. Formatting is excellent - now that I asked SM how to fix the Comic font display on my iPad, I have nothing left to fuss about with that. I would recommend you add a third relevant genre to the item, since that will help you get more visibility and more opportunities to be nominated for a Quill Award. “Career” or “Technology” would be fine. Take care, thanks for sharing, and keep writing My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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