Hi Ben,

This is a fantastic piece. The title is direct and to the point. The reader knows exactly what they will be getting out of the piece. You launch into the piece without introduction or preamble. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the topic and the piece. They will read to the last word. You have explained the kind of life that a U.S. Navy Serviceman lives. A friend of mine serves in the Canadian Navy but talks very little about his work. This piece helped me understand a bit more about what he had dedicated his life to. I am delighted with the look I get at you as a person as well as a writer. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the piece tedious. You use a formal, organized style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.