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 The Indifferent Sea.  [E]
A short poem about the sea and her indifference to both you and me.
by Pericles
Review by Cubby
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Greetings, Pericles! I discovered this poem while browsing through Read & Review and it caught my attention.

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First Impression

I like this very much. It's sad, but so true. It makes me think about the crew of the Edmund Fitzgerald which was a freighter that went down in Lake Superior in the 1970s. Nicely written.

Thoughts/Suggestions

Line 3: The sea care not -- The sea cares not

Line 4: You might consider uncapping the F in For, but that's really up to you. To me personally, it would give it better flow as it's a continuation from the previous line. *Smile*

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