Makyana headed for the ship. She wanted to meet her father about her findings. The experiment was going to happen soon. She made it and the ship went to the laboratory. On a different planet. However, when she got there, she noticed her father was missing and discovered it had been five months. She reported it to the security and then went to her room. Then she went to the meeting. They were going to test it out despite her warnings.

Great details! The voice is realistic. Good hook for first chapter. That is a great starting point. No spelling or grammar errors found. I really think you have the right amount of info to pull me into her life. It is interesting. Good job and keep up the good work!

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