Hi ThievingRage

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Positives

I really like the ending of this story and the way that you set up death to be the ultimate escape from your protagonist's experience. It's a common trope of stories with dark or horror undertones and it was used effectively here.


Suggestions

Typo: "They took her and performed experiments on her."

I was hoping for a little more context on the horrible experiments that the protagonist was subjected to. You have a great imagination for all kinds of horrors visited upon her, but there's not a lot of understanding of why such varied and bizarre experiments were conducted in the first place. I think that would help create an atmosphere of additional dread and creepiness for this piece, if that was delved into a little deeper.


Overall

Overall this was an entertaining, engaging story. Nice work!


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