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 Turtles in Love  [E]
A love poem about two turtles - a rhyming poem.
by Tim Chiu
Review of Turtles in Love  
Review by ScaryBee
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

*Reading* THE POEM

A sweet poem about two turtles who might actually like each other.

*Idea* WHAT I LIKED

The rythme used had a nice rhythm and beat when spoke out loud.

*Star* STRUCTURE

This is a poem with 5 quatrains and an AABB rythme scheme.

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.

*Star* DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "A pleasant turtle, snoring deep – For eighteen hours, not a peep." This is a nice, easy rythme that says a lot. We can picture a turtle just chillin' and sleeping and enjoying his peace.


*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The opening invites the reader in with an easy beat and keeps them reading. The title is descriptive for the poem. I enjoyed the lighthearted love story and I can see where this would appeal to children around 3-5 years.

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