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 Obayo Open in new Window. [E]
Children's Story: A tale of a bird too afraid to fly.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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I enjoyed reading this story and thought it was creatively rendered. The cultural details of the birds colorful feathers and the lush growth and the habits and names of the birds do a nice job of implying a tropical sort of setting, perhaps sub-Saharan Africa.

The narrative seems to lack any particular character development, in fact ending rather abruptly when the bird takes off in sheer fright. We are expecting an epiphany of sorts, but we simply reach the end. It falls flat, in a way. But we do get the essential idea, that sometimes someone is too terrified to do something until the consequences of not doing it are worse than those feared if the action is taken.

I would suggest using Size 4 Verdana font to ensure readability and accessibility across devices. Also, you need two other relevant genres to help people find the story when browsing. You could use “Nature” and “Environment” for this item.

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