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Review #4755488
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Hey, life? Are you kidding me? Open in new Window. [18+]
You never know what you'll find - humor, ramblings, rants, randomness- it's all me!
by audra_branson Author Icon
         Review for entry/chapter: "The HugOpen in new Window.
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  Open in new Window.
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
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*CakeB* HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary ReviewsOpen in new Window.*CakeP*



Hello, Audra!

INITIAL IMPRESSION / OVERVIEW:
*Bulletg* I loved how your personality shined throughout this blog post. It made me like you so much I fanned you.

*Bulletg* You kept me riveted and I read straight through to the end.



MORE DETAILED FEEDBACK:

*Bulleto* Happy Writing.Com Anniversary day and month! I peeked in your portfolio for something to review today and your blog caught my eye. I decided to start with the top post, and here we are. I hope you enjoy this review as a celebration of your time here and find the review uplifting.

*Bulleto* Your blog post made me wish I could give you a big hug! *Hug1**Smile**Hug2*

*Bulleto* Your blog post reminded me of what a beautiful thing it is to be instantly and totally accepted and loved in a friendship way.

*Bulleto* I was happy at how his mother reacted too. It sounds like the three of you turned a potentially awkward situation into a beautiful moment to remember.

*Bulleto* You are wise to actively work towards a more positive mindset more of the time. I've heard that 80% of our happiness comes from our thoughts.

*Bulleto* I loved the thumbnail picture on your main blog (of which this post is a part).

*Bulleto* I thought the genres you selected were perfect for this personal and personable blog of yours.


IDEAS TO MAKE YOUR PIECE STRONGER:
In the spirit of helpfulness, I have a couple little suggestions to make your piece stronger. If you're interested in some constructive criticism, read on. But if you aren't no worries. Just know that I enjoyed your piece and move on to the next section.

Still reading? You're brave! Yay for you!

Both suggestions involve a sentence from the third paragraph. It's the only part that made me pause reading and try to figure out what was wrong / why it was harder to understand than the rest. I'm referring to this sentence: "I know me personally I hang on to hurtful words way too long...I allow them to bring me down." I'm thinking that if you changed "me" to "I," it might read more smoothly? And if you added a comma after "personally," that might help too. Though you are the Language Arts Teacher and I'm just a regular writer, so I'm not sure about the technicalities, just trying to give you ideas to make the sentence smoother. Like any review, this is just my opinion, feel free to consider it or ignore it, as serves you best.

Regardless of that one sentence's challenges, overall, I loved your blog post and enjoyed reading it.


CONCLUSION:
*Bulletv* You have a personable writing style and I greatly enjoyed reading your blog post.

*Bulletv* Thank you for sharing your time, creativity, heart, spirit, experience, and writing with the Writing.Com community!


*Bulletv* Once again, happy anniversary month! I hope the year ahead is filled with blessings and joy for you!

May love, joy and peace be yours in abundance!
PWheeler





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