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 A Cheater's Heart  [13+]
misdeads in thought and thoughtlessness.
by Lou-Here By His Grace
Review of A Cheater's Heart  
Review by Cubby
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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*Tulipp* Greetings, Lou-Here By His Grace! I am reviewing this because I discovered it on Read & Review. *Smile*

*Quill* First of all, my reviews are intended to be helpful and encouraging, not hurtful in any way. Use what you feel works for you, and leave the rest.

*Tulipo* The Positives/What I Liked

         *Bulletv* Wow. This is so powerful and filled with emotion. The entire five stanzas with seven lines in each, amazed me with your heart wrenching words, anguish, and regret.
         *Bulletg* The lines that stood out to me the most, out of your 35 lines, were:

Words you would have said
Blew through the windows
In your soul

(and)

Across the storm tossed bedroom
Of our broken home.

(and)

The scarlet letter of your unvoiced accusation
Branded my troubled soul

(and)

Alone in a litter
Of empty coat hangers
And half destroyed memories


         *Bulletp* Amazing writing!


*Tulipo* Suggestions/Comments to Consider

         The only thing I will suggest for you to consider, is that you uncap the beginning of the lines that are a continuation of the previous one. It kind of blocks the flow a little. No big deal, though. Just a suggestion. *Wink* Otherwise, it was perfect!


*Tulipo* Final Thoughts

         You are quite gifted. Nice work!


Have a great day and...*Quill*
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