Hi SELFTIMESTHREE,

This is a fantastic story. The tone is passionate and intense. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering why the speaker is not with the woman he is dreaming about. They will read to the last word to find out. The story is about a man who loses track of time and thought dreaming about a woman he is very emotionally involved with. The story is narrative as opposed to conflict based. This is rare in literature and very interesting. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characterization is fully developed and believable. The story focuses on the man daydreaming while he is reading, and he comes across as a real person. There is no dialogue but it is not needed here. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. You have accomplished a great deal in just a few words. Great job.