Hi charlie,

This is a fantastic story. The tone is formal. It suits the story and plot very well. The reader is wondering how much jeopardy Juma might be in because of the existence of the Tree of Life. They will read to the last word to find out. The story is about a native from the Amazon rainforest who discovers the Tree of Life and tries to keep its existence a secret. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. There is no dialogue but it is not needed here. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.