Hi FlixTheLizzard,

This is a fantastic story. The tone is formal. It suits the story and plot very well. The reader is wondering if Reg and Max will find El Dorado. They will read to the last word to find out. The story is about two explorers who set out to the Amazon Jungle to search for the lost city of El Dorado. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. There is no dialogue but it is not needed here. The description is detailed and vivid. You use strong imagery to put your reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.