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 Raising Rabbits Open in new Window. [13+]
A dialogue only piece about getting endangered rabbits.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

*Reading* THE STORY

A woman brings home 3 rabbits from a conference and it causes a bunch of trouble.

*Smile* WHAT I LIKED

I really appreciate it when a story can be told using only dialogue. That's a challenge. Well done here.


*Star* DIALOGUE

Dialogue drives the story. Good use of punctuation to communication inflection and tone of voice.

*Star* DESCRIPTIONS

Description is always a challenge with dialogue because it's implied, but here, there's enough to direction to let the scene play out in the reader's imagination. I especially liked: "What?!? You brought home a rabbit?" -- "Three." -- The reader can picture 3 rabbits coming home to a reluctant caretaker.

*Star* SETTING

TIME: Modern day
PLACE: house

This is something that is clarified for the reader.

*Star* CHARACTERS

A couple

You can understand one's love for the rabbits and the other's reluctance. Well done. *Thumbsup*

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any punctuation/spelling mistakes.

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The title fits the story, and the opening pulls the reader right into the dilemma. Well done!
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