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 | Patching Up Pets  [13+] When pets battle  |
| (4.0)| Hi THANKFUL SONALI Love my family ,  Welcome to "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group" Mother's Day Raid! Please remember these are purely my opinions, and any advice given is with the sole intention of being helpful. What I liked:  The conversation between Fido and Rover was my favourite bit. I laughed when I read the various woofs exchanged between them, and I really could imagine the two dogs discussing the mean kitty who attacked Rover. When you went on to translate their conversation, it was exactly as I imagined. Dogs really do have friends among other dogs, so it made me smile to read this. The kitten sounds ever so slightly evil. The part when she jumped on the main character's head and clawed at her scalp was horrible. You described it well, and I found myself cringing at the thought of it. Cats' claws hurt, even when they are only kneeding you in love. I'm not sure I would be friends with Farzana. Firstly, she doesn't walk Fido when she planned to, doesn't even let the main character know she didn't do it. Then, she cares more about her kitten than her friend when the kitten attacks. Suggestions: I wondered why you have bolded certain words. Was this written for a specific prompt and contest? It would be good to know, and you could easily add a dropnote to the end of the story. Parting comments: This story is very enjoyable. I loved the interaction between the animals. You have captured their personalities really well. The last sentence, where Fido smirks at his owner's injuries, made me chuckle. Nice work. Most importantly, keep writing! Choconut
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