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Review #4751672
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Drabbles Open in new Window. [13+]
A book for my 100 word entries
by H❀pe Author Icon
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Greetings,

(I can’t resist making a little joke about “hi, Hopes!” Your username is in the plural *Smile*)

A sad and touching story about the hubris of one man bringing down a whole ship. You’ve captured the essence of a sci-fi story in exactly one hundred words, and given it an appropriate title as well. I had a hard time coming up with a title for mine this week.

I like how you’ve incorporated the solar storm that happened in the past few days. It adds more relevance and relatability to it. The story is shown as well as told, as we watch little Nancy’s blinking cursor with trepidation, guessing all too well what’s about to happen. You leave out the most distressing part and allow us to draw our own all too obvious conclusion. It reminds me of many other sci-fi stories I’ve encountered over the years. I remember one… oh, that was so long ago, in my Elements of Literature textbook. Gosh, was it a student submission or something? I’d never be able to find it again. If I asked the AI to help it would just hallucinate. There was a story with a split perspective between aliens and a little boy on Earth, and it was about how the aliens had created Earth as a test planet, but they were about to destroy it because it was a failure. And the ten second countdown swapped between the aliens pushing the button and the little boy saying “hey, what’s that big light in the sky?” And there was a lot of tension and sadness. Ok, that probably doesn’t have much in common with your story. But you get the idea. It’s the kind of thing that sticks with you.

The word “Earth” should always be capitalized when referring to the planet. Also, I noticed you misspelled the word “Entries” in your blog subtitle. Other than that I see nothing to correct or modify.

Take care, thanks for sharing, and keep writing *HeartT*


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