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She Danced With the Prince Open in new Window. [E]
another young girl's fairy tale
by iluvhorses Author Icon
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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*PenB* First Impressions:

The first thing that jumped out at me was the vivid descriptions. You made it very easy for the readers to imagine the scenes, and there were some beautiful lines, the opening being one of my favourites: Dappled shadows of the leaves played on the path. The characters came across very well, especially the main character who seemed like a lovely girl who enjoyed working in the garden and spending time with her family. I couldn’t quite figure out who she was, not paying close enough attention to the brief description, another young girl's fairy tale. I expected Tansy to be the lucky girl and was waiting for the tell-tale signs, the evil stepmother, the ugly sisters. They didn’t materialise, but that didn’t mean she couldn’t get the prince. After all, she already knew him, both as her brother’s friend and from other dances where he had made a point of dancing with all the young ladies. So when she went to the ball, I thought it was a foregone conclusion. And then there was a twist…


*PenG* Suggestions:

I didn’t notice any errors, but I would suggest increasing the font size. I liked the choice of font; it actually seemed quite fitting for the story, it was just a bit small to read.


*PenP* Final Thoughts:

I enjoyed this story, even though I was a little upset for Tansy, possibly more than she was. The story ended rather abruptly, as it had to after that line that revealed the twist, so the readers didn’t get to see much of Tansy’s reaction. I would like to think that she took it well - she liked the prince but didn’t seem in love with him, and she came across like the kind of girl who could genuinely be glad about someone else’s happiness. I like different takes on old fairy tales, and this one was original and well written. Great read!




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