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 persona Open in new Window. [E]
it is a short poem on my experience of persona
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Oh my, what a colorful and vivid poem. We see your suffering and the things people tell you as you navigate a difficult life, and your self image is conflicted, lost in the bullying and gaslighting.

You have captured these painful emotions in a few brief words that flow conversationally across the page.

The final words haunt us like the famous words of someone we can't quite remember. It's a striking metaphor that will last a long time in our memories. I love the scattered rhymes which add continuity and poeticism to what might almost be a prose paragraph.

I see nothing I would suggest to change or improve here. I'm easygoing with poetry, believing it to be a highly subjective art form where we can feel free to pour out our emotions in any way we like.

If you don't mind, it reminds me of my favorite musical artist, Dan Reynolds from Imagine Dragons. He struggles with mental health and criticism, and the way he responds feels similar to yours, in which case we're all on the same wavelength, which is cool.

Perhaps you could submit this to the First and Second Chance poetry contest, or the Shadows and Light free verse contest. They both take previously written entries and don't require a specific prompt.

Take care, thanks for sharing and keep writing *Smile* *HeartT*


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