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 An Eternal Flame Open in new Window. [E]
Who is the deepest man on the ship metaphorically?
by VictoriaMcCullough Author Icon
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Hello VictoriaMcCullough

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*Penw* Positives

I really liked the message and the imagery in this poem. I thought it was interesting and really well conceptualized.


*Penw* Suggestions

The structure of the poem was a bit confusing for me. The first stanza is an aabc rhyme scheme, but the second stanza is aabb, and the third is abcd, before the fourth goes back to aabc. Because of the varied structure of each stanza, it was a little difficult to get into a rhythm/flow as I was reading.


*Penw* Overall

Overall, I thought this was an enjoyable poem to read, with a great premise and solid execution, despite room for some improvement. Well done!


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