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Review #4750305
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 The Bindlestiff Mystery Open in new Window. [13+]
A story about a boy and mysterious hobo with amnesia
by Molly Author Icon
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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Greetings,

I’ve decided to give an overall review after completing the story, rather than chapter reviews as I read.

First off, the conclusion wrap up reminds me of E L Konigsburg and her type of stories. She delved into a lot of quite similar issues from the same timeframe which were rather heavier or more mature than the type of things I prefer for young people. Which isn’t saying anything bad about your story. I’m just a bit of a fussbudget. But it was a good story that wrapped up well. I’m glad Caleb is a good guy and I like how things turned out.

I’m considering using an amnesia theme for a short story I’ll be writing for a big project where I have to write stories for each song on an album ("Oh My My" Open in new Window.) The track I would be writing it for is Choke, by OneRepublic… your theme has given me ideas as to how to go about it.

I would recommend using Size 4 Verdana font to ensure readability and accessibility across devices. Also you have a good number of minor typos scattered throughout. And scene dividers should be centered. And paragraphs need a line break in between, especially when juggling dialogue. Perhaps Grammarly would be useful.

Take care, thanks for sharing, and keep writing *HeartT*


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