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 A Daughter's Tears Open in new Window. [13+]
Little Kindy bargains and schemes to keep her family together against dragons and devils.
by Joto-Kai Author Icon
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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Greetings,

I figured I’d return the reviewing favor, since you were so kind as to notice my story on the list (October seems like such a long time ago *Laugh*)

This took a couple of reads before I connected all the dots of what’s actually going on, but when I did it became quite interesting. I like the naming device of “Kindman” and his daughter “Kindy.”

The idea of the fae folk setting a trap for the greedy and wicked is quite clever, and the intricacies of the daughter not wanting to lose her father, despite the assumption that he would come back (I assumed at first the daughter was concerned because he would die, and that it was not a good deed) anyway, the development of motivation has potential to go further, perhaps.

As it stands it’s a fun read, with little details that outline the underlying fantasy setting.

Take care, thanks for sharing, and keep writing *HeartT*


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