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 Her All Along  Open in new Window. [E]
No matter what I gave him, treated him, said to him. He always chose here.
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Review of Her All Along  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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A sad poem, with the loose rhyme and repetition of a song. We see a narrator lost in the lies of a would-be lover, wishing things could be better yet knowing they can never be together because he loves another, though likely with as much deceit as is involved here. The punctuation is close to zero, reminiscent of e e cummings or those other poets who played fast and loose with standard rules. Nothing wrong with that; I view poetry as a highly subjective art form, and if your feelings look best arranged that way, that’s perfectly fine. Rules were made to be broken…

You could try submitting this to two of my favorite contests around here, "First and Second Chance Poetry Contest" Open in new Window. and "Shadows and Light Poetry Contest" Open in new Window.. Neither of these requires a prompt and they accept previously written items. Just be sure to include a line count within your item.

In regards to formatting, I always suggest Size 4 Verdana font. You can use the line of boxes above the text entry form to tidy up your items.

Also, I would recommend you choose two more relevant genres to fill out the item, such as “Drama” or “Experience.” This enables others to find your work when browsing, and also allows for more opportunities to be nominated for a Quill Award.

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