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 The Accidental Visit Open in new Window. [E]
A tourist passing through gets an unexpected break.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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A simple and charming first person narrative about a chance encounter with a foreign traveler passing through a small American town. The traveler encounters a stoplight and has a minor accident, and is treated warmly and welcomed by the narrating resident.

I love the thoroughly English name you’ve chosen for the visitor, Cedric Hastings. The overall tone of the item is quite realistic, and we almost feel as though it’s autobiographical, but of course it’s just a story.

I always recommend Size 4 Verdana font to ensure readability and compatibility across devices. Other than that I have little to recommend, as usual, though the story does feel a bit anecdotal and pointless. But I would feel silly lecturing you on such things as goals, stakes and obstacles when it’s obvious you’re well aware of them. I like all forms of stories, from the down-home anecdote to the fully developed tale with a double character arc and lots of plot and action. This is an excellent vignette of a fleeting afternoon of fellowship long remembered by both parties.

Take care, thanks for sharing and keep writing *Smile* *HeartT*


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