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Greetings and welcome to writing.com!

A nifty little story we have here, with conflict, quirky family characters and a relatable situation with a peaceful resolution. I enjoyed reading it. You have a good style and simple flair. I would suggest, at the sentence where the brother realizes what gaming means to his brother, you need a colon instead of the comma at “I think I finally did, it was something…” Other than that you seem to have a good grasp of basic grammar.

If this was written for a contest, as I might guess by your use of a prompt type of statement in the subtitle, a word count is always required to be included in the body of the item when submitting to a contest.
I also tell everyone to use Size 4 Verdana font to ensure readability and compatibility across devices. If you’re not sure how to modify your text block on WdC, just click on the question mark in that row of boxes above the text entry form and that’ll help you figure out which one does what.

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