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Review #4748838
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Dear Me: A Court Action Open in new Window. [13+]
A "Dear Me" conversation continues. (2nd Place winner.)
by JACE Author Icon
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Greetings from the House of Mormont!
By participating in a Writing.com activity called "Game of Thrones" Open in new Window., I am in no way endorsing the GoT franchise or identifying as a fan thereof. I’m here to help my team win *Smile*

Well, this is an ingenious take on the Dear Me prompt. I like how you’ve made a story out of it, even tagging the judges, two of which I’m personally familiar with as well. This has created a time capsule of sorts, reminding you of your goals and dreams, and showing us how hard you have worked to get to the status you now have in this community.

Your persistence and adaptability in the face of changing circumstances is admirable, and you view your accomplishments in a clear and objective light, without boasting or putting anyone down. Your 2010 goals are clear and simple, and by not setting up specific numbers of certain things to reach as you had the previous year, you have allowed yourself flexibility in reaching them and a certain leeway for figuring out if they were met by the end of the year. I suppose the answers are self obvious in seeing your Purple Case and knowing that you occupy a position of high respect here. But have you had anything published yet? I should check your port and see if you mention your publication status.

As a creative personal essay, there is not much I could offer to correct here. Perhaps you should consider using Size 4 font to ensure readability across devices. Also, you did remember to include the word count when you originally wrote this, right? It would be helpful to keep one close to the top or in the subtitle.

Congrats on the second place win. Take care, thanks for sharing, and keep writing *HeartG*

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