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 Disdain by David J. Roche Open in new Window. [13+]
Though a work of fiction, 'Disdain' firmly roots its narrative in reality.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Wow, what a tale of pain and suffering, alleviated by the determined efforts of the British army and thousands of helpers.

I’m not sure how much of this is fictional and how much is strictly accurate… that’s the problem with “fictionalized” accounts of historical events. I’m not especially well-read on the horrors of WW2, preferring to keep such distressing stories at arms length. But this sample is excellently written, stating facts of human depravity and the conditions at the camp with clarity but not dwelling upon the gruesome details in a lingering manner. The hope and hard work of the British and all those who came to the salvation of the death camp is emphasized, and the techniques involved in saving the prisoners are interesting. I will have to look up Glyn Hughes to see if he actually existed; as I remarked it’s hard to tell which parts are fictional in such a brief sample.

That first paragraph, though, strikes me as being a bit out of place… how is a historical fiction based on the realities of WW2 also a “horror/fantasy/Stephen King” style story about a “malevolent entity?” I understand the metaphor, but the first paragraph which is presumably an excerpt from the book doesn’t seem to match up with the matter of fact tone of the rest of the sample.

I assume this is an “advertisement” of sorts for the complete book, which can presumably be found on Amazon. Perhaps you should clarify what purpose this item serves and provide us a link to purchase the book. Oh, and the very first mention of a date is in error; you have it down as “British Army stationed in 1980s Germany” when it becomes obvious that 1940’s is meant. I would recommend using Size 4 Verdana font here to make it easier to read and give it a more “important” appearance.

Aside from that I see nothing which I would suggest changing. The sample and background provided makes me interested in finding out more about the book.

Thanks for sharing, take care and keep writing *HeartG*

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