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 | The First Years  [E] For SLAM!ME Round 7  |
| (4.5)  This Review was done on behalf of House Targaryen as part of "Game of Thrones" ! Hi Sophurky .I'm JACE , and I have the honor of reviewing your offering "The First Years" . The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer, and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise.  Overall Impression. Once again I find myself in your Port. In truth, your offering popped up on the Read & Review feature. I decided to take this trip down memory lane with you.I was 24, a college graduate, a US Army Corps of Engineer officer ... and scared as hell when I got married. Laura had never been away from home until her freshman year at college, where we met. We moved to Germany two days after our marriage to a small Kaserne with no available housing. We moved into an apartment on the German economy, and two days later I went on a field training exercise for three weeks. Laura was alone on the economy, spoke no German, and had no European driver's license to even go shopping. Back in the 70's the Army had little concern for dependents. Reading about your experiences in your early years of marriage--pardon me for assuming these are some of your experiences--takes me back to many such nights. You have pegged the meals, the shopping, the finances and all perfectly. In our case I think we called home once in two years. Just think--long distance was a real thing. Sometimes thinking back, I'm amazed we survived those years long enough to start a family. That's another story on its own. I must agree with you about the earliest days of our marriage being some of the best days of our lives. We learned that we could do the things needed to survive, and we found new strengths. Speaking of strengths, during my exercise Laura made the acquaintance of a German lady next door. By the time I returned, she was able to go shopping, learned basic German, and was much more capable. Surviving one's youth especially with a partner is no easy task. I feel as you--blessed to having gone through the trials. And thanks for taking me along on your remembrance.  Editorial Thoughts.  You used the same phrase between sections everytime except once. I'm curious as to why that one time was changed.  Technical Considerations. I found no issues with your grammar and punctuation.  My Rating. 4.5. Thank you for sharing your offering.
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