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 The Funeral Pyre Open in new Window. [13+]
A maid's curiosity leads to quiet, tragic yearning for her broken vampire employer.
by MERORDLE Author Icon
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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A woman gets a job working for someone that most advise not working for, a vampyr. There's a number of rumors about them, but are they true, or lies? There's plenty that could be said, as the woman tries to do her job. However, her mind becomes filled with thoughts about the vampyr, causing her to wonder.

Characters
The characters seem interesting. I wonder if there is a part 2.

Spelling and Grammar

When the vampyr is talking about their family, she refers to them as "we" instead of "they". Might want to change it, unless she's not sure where she is. *Laugh*

Well, this is the BIG BAD WOLF, and I howl at the moon every night.
HOWLLLLLLLLLLLLL!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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