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 Invisibility Potion Open in new Window. [13+]
Theresa heads out to investigate what is happening across the realm.
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Review by Lyn's a Wit... Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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My name is Lyn, I am one of the sly foxes.

Title: Invisibility Potion

First Impression: I knew I gave the potion to the right person. You did an excellent job on your reconnaissance mission and definitely showed our team who we needed to keep a close on. Kudos. I thought it was hilarious that Kit was the one to uncover you.

What needs your attention: I didn't see any spag as Joey calls its, spelling, punctuation and grammar. But don't tell Gaby, I didn't look either. As I told Jayne or Annette in one of reviews punctuation is my sadness.

What part I liked best: I chuckled when you decided that you needed the second swig and our reaction as you vanished right in front of us. I didn't know turquoise was your birthstone, see it was meant to be you. I chose that vial becasue 3 is my favorite number.

Overall impression: The potion's goals was to determine the other teams strengths and weaknesses which was accomplished in a delightful story that will be remembered long past the games.

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What does the Fox say????? 3 more days, wingman! Team Florent can do anything we set our mind too!
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