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![]() | You won the lottery? Now what happens? ![]() Come have some fun and add a line to help write the rest of this story! Its up to YOU! ![]() |
A "Game of Thrones" ![]() ![]() ![]() The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise. Hello AliceLvs2Write ![]() I found your interactive on the "Please Review" ![]() First impression: In your write up on the Please Review page, you ask for additions to your in and out. You should consider posting your in and out with the request on "Activities @ Writing.Com" ![]() ![]() What works: You did a great job at choosing three genres that all combined with the title and intro line create a good bit of a backdrop to your story before it even begins. There is the promise of high drama and the need to keep things mysterious. The question: how would someone conceal a lottery win from their own family is sure to get the creative juices in the community flowing. What needs work: Someone added a line that goes well above the E rating that you chose and also demanded. I am not sure if you can delete it, but you should try. Final thoughts: Both the idea of hiding a lottery win as well as asking that the starting letter is the next one in the alphabet is a really fun way to create a cohesive story. I hope you get a lot of takers.
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