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 You and I Open in new Window. [13+]
2/08 Getting to know you better and expressing how I feel.
by Fivesixer Author Icon
Review of You and I  Open in new Window.
In affiliation with House of Sensual Prose  Open in new Window.
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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A "Game of Thrones"  Open in new Window. by Creeper Of The Realm Author Icon Review

Subject: This feels like a budding relationship as one stays guarded, and the other tries to convey how they feel, hoping their love interest will let their guard down and let him in.

Flow: The poem moved well from beginning to end as this tale of love unfolded.

Description: The first line pulls the reader in, thoughts of not being able to get lost in another, when they actually already are, to be so connected and giving themselves to the other as a gift, almost like an open book for discovery laid bare.

Overall Impression: There seems to be a struggle here as if the main person is experiencing some sort of restraint in letting their feelings out, almost as if their love interest is not accepting what they have to offer, yet they somehow manage to bring out the best of them. Bringing out the best in someone is never a bad thing in my opinion. When that kind of insight hits, it brings about profound understanding. When those feelings are reciprocated, it brings about experiences no one wants to let go of. The dream of being together forever, of sharing eternity with the one you love is something most of us hope to find. I am still rereading this one, hoping I truly did understand the message not miss the mark entirely.






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