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 Me, Myself, and I (2019). Open in new Window. [E]
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by SeanFhear Author Icon
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hi SeanFear

My name is Lyn, I am one of the sly foxes.

Title: Me, Myself, and I (2019)

First Impression: Interesting concept but this reader is left wondering is the author talking to himself or is he speaking to the reader. I see in the description that it says my thoughts but in some lines it feels like the reader is being scolded.

What needs your attention:

1. I'll use this line as an example: When innocent, explain your reasons and excuses only in front of an intelligent form. Otherwise, your words are irrelevant to the accuser and silence becomes a virtue.

By simply changing your to the it takes away the feeling the line is directed at the reader.

2.Wish if my mood is as predictable as a weather forecast. Wish my mood was as predictable as a weather forecast makes more sense.


What part I liked best: The author entries transpire for a year giving the reader a glance into his life pre-covid times.

Overall impression: The concept is interesting but there are many places where the author gives the reader the feeling of finger pointing or judgement that I don't believe is the author's intent.


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