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 |  | My Mother the Star  [ASR] A mother and daughter in the roaring 20's  |
| (4.5)| Hi Maryann , This review was written on behalf of House Targaryen as part of "Game of Thrones" ! Disclaimer The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise. What I liked ... Oh, my word. So much! This is a beautiful story, Maryann.  The constant references to the things that were new and in existence in the Roaring 20s made me smile a lot. This is a real cultural gem. This works particularly well because the narrator is a child. Everything is exciting and important, and, in a way, naive. I love this child's voice. Which is great because her mother is a silent film star, and so doesn't have so much of a voice. But the girl is really likeable. Firstly, I smiled at the mention of how many people now had automobiles. Their car was a Ford Model T. This puts your readers in the 1920s straight away. And then, there is the Chanel perfume the girl's mother likes to wear. Perfume is a fairly new item for Chanel, and that also made me smile. I felt as though I was in this narrator's world. When she "danced the Charleston with Charlie Chaplin" I laughed out loud. That's brilliant! I have to admit, I was a little bit envious of the girl when she said that. This sentence is my favourite of the whole story: "My mother told me that body language is the main voice of life." How true. And eloquently phrased. Wonderful! At the heart of the story, despite the cultural Heaven you put me in, this is a warm story about a mother and daughter relationship. The girls speaks of how her life is different from that of other children, but also the same as other children. Her mother, while a silent movie star, is the same as all mothers. She loves her daughter and even goes into battle with the science teacher on her behalf. I loved that part. It showed how much she loved her. As an aside, it reminded of the song 'Harper Valley PTA,' which I'm always happy to have in my head.Suggestions: Just a couple of minor points. "She listens to the same jazz age music on the radio that everyone else’s mother listens to." It should be "everyone else's mothers." Also, "My teacher seemed very disgusted with me ..." I would cut out very because you are either disgusted, or you're not. You don't need very. Parting comments: I have thoroughly enjoyed reading this story. I'm so glad I came back to your port for one last time in the Games. Beautiful story. Choconut   My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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