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 | Prodigal 2424  [E] Two astronauts visit their old home.  |
| (4.0)  The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise. Hello, KingsSideCastle !  I found your story at the "The Writer's Cramp" ! I could tell by the title it was a sci-fi, and it was nice to see it paired with the genre nature—it made for an interesting story. I thought the conversation between the two astronauts was done well to hook a reader in to find out more. I liked how it worked into talking about earth and it ended in a natural way.  As far as the feedback goes, I have a few suggestions for your consideration. It's totally up to you if you want to edit anything. I thought a few of the descriptions could have been expanded a little more especially with their surroundings. There are some typos to fix: Needs a period. The two astronauts surveyed the landscape[.] ...enough warning sighs. [signs] "Perhap ..." [Perhaps] They astronauts boarded... [The] Check in other places for some typos. It always helps to read it out loud.  Overall, I thought it was a fun sci-fi/nature story to read. As I mentioned, the dialog was done well, and I liked the humorous approach to the bantering between these two astronauts. It was a creative concept for the prompt of Earth Day. My favorite part has to be the way it ended. Kind of sad, but true. It was nice to visit you today! Lornda My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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You responded to this review 04/28/2024 @ 8:08pm EDT