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Hi Inksplodge

My name is Lyn, I am one of the sly foxes.

Title: Binding

First Impression: The reader has the feeling the author isn't sure of the commitment made. Was it just her or was it mutual? There's doubt throughout the poem whereas someone confident in their feelings would be stating it emphatically on the page.
Are we discussing a binding ceremony that is a Pagan choice or are we talking metaphorically binding?

What needs your attention: This is a stream of consciousness free style poem that leaves the reader wondering what the author needs to make it a stronger poem. If the intent is to show the cofusion and insecurity in the beginning of a relationship than that's been accomplished though this reader would suggest organizing the thoughts more to give it a stronger message.

What part I liked best: Heart straining and yanking the chains of fate is cliche but it still appeals to this reader.

Overall impression: I believe the author can make this poem stronger by organizing the conflicted emotions and adding stronger verbs and tossing the cliches to the curb.

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What does the Fox say?????


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