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 | Oh, It's Funny Now  [13+] ..but at the time, not so much. Based on a true story, haha.  |
| (4.5)  This Review was done on behalf of House Targaryen as part of "Game of Thrones" ! Hi elizjohn .I'm JACE , and I have the honor of reviewing your offering "Oh, It's Funny Now" . The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer, and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise.  Overall Impression. Good morning. I'm reviewing your humble offering as part of a "Game of Thrones" event task requiring me to review five members whose Username begins with the letters A through E. I wanted someone I've not reviewed before and found you. You are my E.I really enjoyed your story. And being based on a true story makes it even better. I've always thought facts and details make the tale. And truth is hard to top ... though imagination does come in a close second.  Editorial Thoughts. While I was reading, I began to wonder about Francis pushing the issue as hard as he was. You don't really state the relationship between them beyond a basic friendship. Nothing is stated about anything deeper. Thus, I thought him pushing was a bit out of character.Obviously one thought that occurred to me was he thought she was meeting someone else on Saturday night but didn't want him to know. But if they were just friends, why not give a reason? Of course, that reason becomes apparent. Your story permitted me to think back on similar situation in my life where we look back on disagreements that seemed so explosive or out of step with reality at the time, that are now fond memories. I guess our minds do that to maintain a semblance of sanity.  Technical Considerations. I found your dialogue to be well written and realistic. I didn't find any punctuation errors. Your grammar was spot on. A well written story. [Just a personal note that has no bearing on your essence of your story: Consider using a larger font size for your older readers. WDC's default size of 3.0 can be hard to read.] My Rating. 4.5. Thank you for sharing your offering.
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You responded to this review 05/07/2024 @ 8:04pm EDT