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The Not So Calm Before the Storm  [13+]
An odd group of birdwatchers take shelter and trouble brews.
by Ẃeβ࿚ẂỉԎḈĥ
Review by Beholden
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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Review of The Not So Calm Before the Storm by Ẃeβ࿚ẂỉԎḈĥ

I love your description of the disparate group of birdwatchers (called "twitchers" in Britain, strangely enough). An odd bunch indeed!

This is an account of the group settling into a forest cabin, to the accompaniment of various troubles, caused mostly by a resident and badly behaved cat. Order is eventually restored when the owner, a little old lady, returns to find the group occupying her home. In case we thought that was the end of the shenanigans, there is a parting shot from the cat, whose eyes glow red as it casts a look at the narrator. There are more troubles ahead, it seems...

Description in the piece is handled with considerable skill, each person being dealt with in a few telling and amusing words, and the view from the window proving to be suitably sylvan. The action does become a little disjointed and is hard to foloow in places. For instance: "landing right on Mr. Twitch’s neck, forcing his head backward and through the window" - I had difficulty in picturing this, imagining that the cat had jumped on Twitch's back, in which case it wouldn't have been able to force his head back. So it must have landed on his neck and chest, but we should have this explained. It would also be good to let us see the glass shattering, instead of learning about that later.

I found a couple of minor errors:

"My mini mix of binocular toters pushed passed me" - pushed past, not "passed"

"until the doorknob opened" - I think the doorknob turned and it was the door that opened.

Otherwise, it's a merry old romp with plenty of action, strained personal relationships and amusing incidents. Quite a carry on!

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