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Hi Pure Poetry

My name is Lyn, I am one of the sly foxes.

Title: Feelings and Emotions

First Impression: This is a new poem in your collection, nicely expressed in couplets.

What needs your attention: The rain is here this cold dark night as I dream a dream of light. This line changes the cadence of your poem changes with the choppiness of this line. Is it really needed to talk about I dream a dream of light. The rain is here on this cold dark night and it rhymes perfectly with tight. Or I long for dreams of light on this rainy cold dark night.
Just food for thought to consider

What part I liked best: I don't know where this poem is going but I'll write it anyway My pen is active here right now, I have many things to say. I know exactly what the author means becasue most of my own writing is in pencil when my family is sleeping and I'm still lying awake. I take my journal and curl up in the rocker and write by my reading light that clips to my book. I've been known to be there when the sunrises having lost all track of time.

Overall impression: I enjoyed the poem immensely except for the first line of the second couplet which reads choppy and changes the cadence of the poem for me

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What does the Fox say????? Poetry rules.


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