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Hi Naomi

My name is Lyn, I am one of the sly foxes.

Title: Silence

First Impression: Unfortunately, silence is something many people fear because they aren't ready to reflect on themselves unlike the author who embraces it in her life.

What needs your attention:
The author's opening line indicates her love for song but skimmed the answers to her opening statement when she could have dived in deeper why she loves it, why it heals her.
Like here:
Silence offers me the answers I need.
It gives me clarity to make my best forward movement, a sure guidance. WHY? Give the reader something to actually connect with. Not just a broad blanket statement.

What part I liked best: "It is in SILENCE that I love myself more, I know myself more. It gives me great comfort as I get in touch with my spiritual essence, giving me the most nourishing power more than words can say." This section the author shared her vulnerability with the reader. That shared moment is what the author should build upon in the remaining parts of the piece.

Overall impression: I'm very familiar with the song, and the artists that chosen to do a cover of the song.

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What does the Fox say?????
Hello darkness, my old friend
I've come to talk with you again
Because a vision softly creeping
Left its seeds while I was sleeping
And the vision that was planted in my brain
Still remains
Within the sound of silence


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