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A Fisherman's Tale Open in new Window. [E]
Its giant body slinked just below the surface
by 👼intuey Author Icon
Review by JayNaNoOhNo Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
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This is a "Game of Thrones" Open in new Window. review!


Hello, 👼intuey!

*Checkb*Overall Impression:
The poem is captivating and narrates the experience of encountering a mythical sea creature under the moonlit sky. The poem is a great blend of elements of awe and terror, drawing readers into the deep and unpredictable world of maritime folklore.

*Checkb*Form, Rhythm, Cadence, and Style:
Free verse style allows the narrative to flow smoothly as it builds tension and wonder. The rhythm has an occasional internal rhyme and measured line breaks, effectively mirroring the ebb and flow of the ocean. Your use of vivid imagery and dramatic presentation intensifies the mystical atmosphere.

*Checkb*Content:
The content has plenty of symbolic layers, comparing the creature to a blend of a Beluga sturgeon and a great white shark, which adds a mythical quality to the poem. The narrative arc—from the initial sighting to the chaotic reaction and back to a semblance of normalcy captures the traditional essence of a fisherman's exaggerated tale.

This was exceptional writing:

A massive tail rose toward the heavens,
His front half bent down to the lowest hell.
Then he slammed the hammer down on the water,
With a thunderous roar, freezing sprays rained down.

*Checkb*Grammar and Mechanics:
The structure is well-executed, with careful attention to grammar. The narrative is clear and impactful, keeping the reader engaged. I found no glaring spelling or grammar concerns.

*Checkb*Final Thoughts:
The story is engaging, leaving the reader questioning the line between reality and fiction, much like the listeners of the fisherman's story. This poem entertains and resonates with the timeless tradition of storytelling in fishing cultures, making it a memorable and impactful read.

Thank you for sharing your work with us!

JayNaNoOhNo Author Icon*Smile*


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