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 | The Beast of Blackbriar Swamp  [E] A man travelling through a swamp on his way home encounters something terrifying.  |
| (4.5)| Hello Detective! This review is given on behalf of "Game of Thrones" . This was a good story with a bit of horror, suspense, drama, and mystery.The Title and Description - I love the title. It holds an intrigue and sounds like an urban legend. Your description is well written and urged me to read on. The Storyline/Plot - A man is traveling down a road in Blackbriar Swamp. He has heard about the monster that has haunted this swamp for a good part of his life. He's on horseback when loud noises start to disrupt the peace. The noise gets so bad, it spooks the horse who throws the rider off. The sounds and loud thrashes get louder and closer. Will he make it out of the swamp alive? The Setting - Good job with the descriptions and details. They enabled me to envision each scene as I read. Whar I Liked Best - The mystery of what was going to happen, and what type of monster was threatening him. Below are a few suggestions. Please use or discard them as you see fit.  He urged the his horse  than he was expected. branch and litA comma is needed after branch  illumination thenillumination than  his eye heA comma is needed after eye  stood between.stood between them.  his right had his right hand Thank you so much for sharing your writing with us. I enjoyed it.  Intuey"When you play the Game of Thrones you win, or you die." Cersei Lannister   The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise.  My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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You responded to this review 04/23/2024 @ 9:51pm EDT