I hear the angle sing... [ASR] I wrote this piece 11/23/04. I lost a family member then and over the years. |
Greetings, Chaka-khan Wigfall! I am reviewing this because I discovered it on Read & Review. I also noticed you are new to Writing.com. Welcome! It's an awesome community! If you have any questions, feel free to ask. First of all, my reviews are intended to be helpful and encouraging, not hurtful in any way. Use what you feel works for you, and leave the rest. The Positives/What I Liked A beautiful free-verse piece from an angel's point of view--an angel who sings from above, knowing his/her legacy will be passed down through his/her children, through their eyes and smiles, like his/her own. How lovely! This poem warms my soul as I think about my own loved ones who have died and how their smile or eyes or whatever, has been passed down to me. I am a part of them. Suggestions/Comments to Consider Throughout: angle angel I used to have trouble with this word, too. Just remember angle rhymes with tangle. I also remind myself that the second syllable in angel, is gel. It may all sound a bit silly, but it works for me. Stanza 2 - Line 4: thou brief though brief Stanza 3 - Line 4: joycefully look joyfully look Final Thoughts An absolutely beautiful piece, obviously written from the heart. Have a great day and... K e e p on W r i t i n g ! Cubby ")
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