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 I hear the angle sing...  [ASR]
I wrote this piece 11/23/04. I lost a family member then and over the years.
by Chaka-khan Wigfall
Review by Cubby
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Rated: ASR | (4.0)
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*Tulipp* Greetings, Chaka-khan Wigfall! I am reviewing this because I discovered it on Read & Review. *Smile* I also noticed you are new to Writing.com. Welcome! It's an awesome community! If you have any questions, feel free to ask.

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*Tulipo* The Positives/What I Liked


         *Bulletv* A beautiful free-verse piece from an angel's point of view--an angel who sings from above, knowing his/her legacy will be passed down through his/her children, through their eyes and smiles, like his/her own. How lovely! This poem warms my soul as I think about my own loved ones who have died and how their smile or eyes or whatever, has been passed down to me. I am a part of them.


*Tulipo* Suggestions/Comments to Consider

         Throughout: angle *Right* angel I used to have trouble with this word, too. Just remember angle rhymes with tangle. I also remind myself that the second syllable in angel, is gel. It may all sound a bit silly, but it works for me. *Wink*
         Stanza 2 - Line 4: thou brief *Right* though brief
         Stanza 3 - Line 4: joycefully look *Right* joyfully look


*Tulipo* Final Thoughts

         An absolutely beautiful piece, obviously written from the heart.


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