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 Lunch Open in new Window. [GC]
Who is on the menu? (Adult - Second Person Narrative)
by 🌕 HuntersMoon Author Icon
Review of Lunch  Open in new Window.
In affiliation with House of Sensual Prose  Open in new Window.
Rated: GC | (5.0)
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A "Game of Thrones"  Open in new Window. by Creeper Of The Realm Author Icon Review


Storyline: A good naughty work story. I loved this one! She goes from being bored and alone to having an experience that will leave her with memories and wonder the next time she thinks about it.

Spelling/Grammar Issues:
your panties[period here?] Almost involuntarily,

Description/emotion: Great description in this one. I was pulled in immediately and identified with the main character. I could picture the encounter unfolding, first as she was alone and took matters into her own hands, and then when she was interrupted, embarrassed, but let things play out. The second character knew exactly what was going down behind the desk, and didn't waste a second before getting involved. Very hot story, and not a stretch of the imagination.

Overall Impression: This was well written. It had all the heat and excitement I was expecting. From the excitement she felt thinking she was alone and could pull this off in the middle of the work day to being caught and letting him help her over that most fulfilling threshold. It does make one wonder what happens the next time they cross paths! Another juicy encounter, or just knowing they have this shared secret to look back on? Good job with the prompt and great story.




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