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A Feast of Hunger Open in new Window. [E]
A bittersweet love story (A Try Your Luck Entry)
by 🌕 HuntersMoon Author Icon
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi 🌕 HuntersMoon Author Icon,

This review is a part of "Game of Thrones" Open in new Window. [13+]. *Smile*

Overall Impression:

This is a sad yet beautiful poem about love held and lost. It was there once, enough to make promises of an ever after, but then life happened. Unfortunately, this isn't a rare occurrence. It is tough to keep the romance going through our day-to-day realities.

I like the realism of this poem because the love didn't leave the relationship because of something dramatic. There was no betrayal, but 'a world of crumbs' that slowly but surely add up. It's something every couple hope doesn't happen to them. It must be horrible when you fall out of love, or your partner falls out of love with you, and there's nothing you can do about it because when it's gone, it's gone.

On the technical side of things, well, I didn't expect any trouble because you know what you are doing. And, indeed, you did a great job here. There is an excellent rhythm and flow. The rhyming's perfect. Well done!

Suggestions:

I have no suggestions, sorry. There were no typos, no issues with the grammar, and as I mentioned above both rhythm and rhyme were perfect. There is nothing that I feel should be improved upon. Again, excellent work!

My Rating:

This is a sad but beautiful poem. It touched me deeply.

I had no suggestions. Therefore, I will give this item the 5 out of 5 it deserves.

Thank you for sharing your work.

Write on!

Kit

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